What We Can Learn from Michelle and Hillary
Wednesday, August 27th, 2008Depending on which party you prefer, speeches during the Democratic and Republican conventions are either dazzling or disgusting. But politics aside, I find many of them illuminating and worth study because they are often written by the best speech writers in the business.
Supposedly, Michelle Obama wrote her own speech delivered Monday night at the Democratic convention. Even so, I’m sure there was plenty of input from the professionals. Two things in that speech stood out for me, lessons that I try to emulate myself as well as convey to my clients: using concrete examples and telling anecdotes.
Rather than just claiming Barack helped people on the streets of Chicago, Michelle made it come alive with specifics, “setting up job training to get people back to work and after school programs to keep kids safe — working block by block to help people lift up their families.”
She didn’t just speak in generalities about the spirit of people in America, but instead talked about “People who work the day shift, kiss their kids goodnight, and head out for the night shift — without disappointment, without regret — that goodnight kiss a reminder of everything they’re working for. The military families who say grace each night with an empty seat at the table. The servicemen and women who love this country so much, they leave those they love most to defend it.”
Obama personalized the speech and told brief anecdotes about her father who had muscular dystrophy as well as remembering the first speech she heard Barack give.
On Tuesday night, Hillary Clinton gave what was probably one of the most difficult speeches of her career, trying to assuage those who voted for while satisfying everyone else that she showed enough support for Obama. Again, politics aside, I think it was a well-written speech with specifics, anecdotes, humor and interesting uses of language.
For me, the Harriet Tubman story about helping slaves on the underground railroad was very effective, especially because of its repeated phrase: keep going, keep going, keep going.
Another well constructed part of speech used the repetition of “more” and “less:”
“But we don’t need four more years … of the last eight years. More economic stagnation … and less affordable health care. More high gas prices … and less alternative energy. More jobs getting shipped overseas … and fewer jobs created here. More skyrocketing debt … home foreclosures … and mounting bills that are crushing our middle class families. More war … less diplomacy. More of a government where the privileged come first … and everyone else comes last.”
A couple of clever things I also liked: the sisterhood of the traveling pantsuits and the play on the Republicans’ convention site: “With an agenda like that, it makes sense that George Bush and John McCain will be together next week in the Twin Cities. Because these days they’re awfully hard to tell apart.”
And then the best line in the speech: “I want you to ask yourselves: Were you in this campaign just for me? Or were you in it for that young Marine and others like him? Were you in it for that mom struggling with cancer while raising her kids? Were you in it for that boy and his mom surviving on the minimum wage? Were you in it for all the people in this country who feel invisible?”
Of course we all know that delivery is a critical piece of any speech. I thought both women did well, using gestures, inflection and pausing. Without actually witnessing it ourselves, we can’t imagine what it’s like to speak to an audience of 20,000. You could tell by the way Hillary carried herself on the stage that she was the most experienced at speaking to large audiences.
Can’t wait to hear Bill Clinton and then the Republicans.


